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Talk:Book burning in Qin Dynasty

2013-02-28T20:10:16Z

Dr who:

=New comments in 2013=
Dear Christopher, please start by uploading your powerpoint presentation and then extend the existing article. Now it is still too short. The final version should be 7 pages. You need to stick to the 1st person narrative ("I", "me" etc.) and not only describe things, but also switch to the commentator role (maybe indicated by "Contemporary Commentator" and then evaluate and discuss the topic from different angles, put it into context, criticize etc.). If you want to write less, you can integrate more pictures. Please make sure to indicate your source after each sentence or, if there is a whole paragraph with the same source, after each paragraph. You can indicate it like "Smith 2009:345" and in the final section "References" write the long version "Smith, Jared, Confucius revisted, Yale University Press 2009, 415 pp." In the edit mode, section headers are indicated with "=" and sub section headers with "==". In the edit mode, paragraphs need to be marked with 2 line feeds ("Enter" key). 1 Line feed will not show up as a paragraph. For additional editing tips, including how to indicate sources and how to find copyright free pictures, please refer to [http://wiki.vm.rub.de/uvu/index.php/uvu:Community_Portal]. Good luck with your composition! Best, [[User:Root|Root]] ([[User talk:Root|talk]]) 13:34, 25 February 2013 (CET)

The beginning still needs to be done in first person. I like the commentary that you provide through the perspective of QinShiHuang.[[User:Oprah wind fury| Oprah wind fury]] ([[User talk:Oprah wind fury|talk]]) 15:12, 27 February 2013 (MST)

Good job. Your powerpoint was great. The book burning seems kind of controversial, like the Kennedy assassination. It seems as though we'll never know the veritable truth about it, but just little details. Dr who (talk) 28 February 2013 (CET)

Talk:Empresses

2013-02-28T20:07:14Z

Dr who:

Dear Mallory, that looks good! I especially like how you linked the pptx and got the picture. [[User:Root|Root]] ([[User talk:Root|talk]]) 18:50, 26 February 2013 (CET)

== How were the Empresses treated as compared to the concubines who held power in China?[[User:Anonymous5|Anonymous5]] ([[User talk:Anonymous5|talk]]) 21:36, 27 February 2013 (CET)

It may be too short but it looks like the professor is happy with it so at this point maybe you are fine? Other than that it is great. [[User:Oprah wind fury| Oprah wind fury]] ([[User talk:Oprah wind fury|talk]]) 02:00, 28 February 2013 (MST)

I loved your powerpoint today. I did not realize the women of these dynasties were so influential. Great job!. Dr who (talk) 28 February 2013 (CET)

Talk:Confucius

2013-02-28T20:05:22Z

Dr who:

=New comments in Spring 2013=
Dear Tara and Loren, you write this article together. Please contact each other and work well together. Loren is more concentrating on the historical part and Tara more on the literary aspect of Confucius. [[User:Root|Root]] ([[User talk:Root|talk]]) 19:55, 26 February 2013 (CET)

*Dear Loren, this is a good start, but still too short. The final version should be 7 pages. If you want to write less, you can integrate more pictures. Please make sure to indicate your source after each sentence or, if there is a whole paragraph with the same source, after each paragraph. You can indicate it like "Smith 2009:345" and in the final section "References" write the long version "Smith, Jared, Confucius revisted, Yale University Press 2009, 415 pp." In the edit mode, section headers are indicated with "=" and sub section headers with "==". In the edit mode, paragraphs need to be marked with 2 line feeds ("Enter" key). 1 Line feed will not show up as a paragraph. For additional editing tips, including how to indicate sources and how to find copyright free pictures, please refer to [http://wiki.vm.rub.de/uvu/index.php/uvu:Community_Portal]. Good luck with your composition! Best, [[User:Root|Root]] ([[User talk:Root|talk]]) 13:16, 25 February 2013 (CET)
*Please look at the spelling error in your file name "Cunfucius.ppt". Also, the file is not complete, since it was larger than allowed. I will split it into 2 files and upload it again, as well as get rid of the side "Kong Fuzi". Please integrate your findings in the existing article. I am looking forward your midterm paper. Thank you! [[User:Root|Root]] ([[User talk:Root|talk]]) 22:00, 19 February 2013 (CET)
*Please work also on the travels of Confucius and talk about the possibility that they were made up by Mencius and why.
*Please look again through the powerpoint presentation for consistency of referring to Confucius as "I" and not as "He".
You can also explain on the slide with the names, from when on these names were used. And you can indicate (in the mid-term paper), that the use of "Kongzi" in a text helps us to date it, because dating is crucial for seeing what might be authentic and what was made up later, especially during the Han times, when they started a Confucius cult.
*Please also explain (at least in the paper) the different versions of the Analects and distinguish between the historical person Zhong Ni and the later made up sage "Kong Fuzi".
*These are just a few ideas I had when I looked at your revised presentation.
*There are also some pictures, who are not visible in my version of your ppt. It looks like you embedded them with Quicktime, but not everybody has it. So you may want to send me the pictures one by one and I can help you to input them in the presentation again the normal way (in Powerpoint using "Insert" "Graphic").[[User:Root|Root]] ([[User talk:Root|talk]]) 22:13, 19 February 2013 (CET)

I like that you have as many sources as you do, it makes the article more credible. I would do some more proof reading to make sure the wording is more coherent.[[User:Oprah wind fury|Oprah wind fury]] ([[User talk:Oprah wind fury|talk]]) 15:09, 27 February 2013 (MST)

It would be good to proofread the paragraphs; there are a few grammatical errors that appear in the article. Maybe not accurate, but I remember hearing the concept of "Wen" when I've heard others discuss Confucius, which was literary studies and the moral value of such an idea; it might be a good thing to research and add to the page. [[User:Cappuccino|Cappuccino]] ([[User talk:Cappuccino|talk]]) 08:01, 26 February 2013 (CET)

I think having a conclusion paragraph would be beneficial.--[[User:TaraDFroisland|MerchantThief]] ([[User talk:TaraDFroisland|talk]]) 02:46, 28 February 2013 (CET)

It looks pretty good. I like all the pictures you put in there. [[User:Ratu|Ratu]] ([[User talk:Ratu|talk]]) 8:36, 28 February 2013 (CET)

This was quite lengthy and very informative. My favorite part was when you mentioned about filial piety, and the golden rule, etc. I like hearing confucian philosophy. He was a smart guy. Dr who (talk) 28 February 2013 (CET)

=old comments=
Hey, it's a start...[[User:Licia K|Licia K]] 05:13, 6 February 2012 (UTC)

Dear Licia, please paste your reading in turn notes here and upload your ppt. Please make sure to include the sources, also of images. See the section on images in our [http://wiki.vm.rub.de/uvu/index.php/uvu:Community_Portal#How_to_upload_and_integrate_media_like_pictures.2C_powerpoint_presentations_etc. instructions]. Thanks! [[User:Root|Root]] 00:00, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

== I only did the presentation in the Classical Literature class. Since this article is also listed in the Traditional History class, (where the teacher did the presentation, but did not post any notes) I didn't upload the literature ppt. (I posted this in the History class section also, because, you can't have China history without Confucius! Someone had to post some sort of article about him, so I volunteered).[[User:Licia K|Licia K]] 03:33, 14 June 2012 (UTC)

Great pic! I think it could use a reference or two. [[User:Jimmerica]] 11:13, 18 April 2012 (UTC)

Use the thumbnail adjustment on that picture. [[User:Alchemist1330]]

===Comment 4===
I though when the topic is a person it must be in first person? If not please ignore this. Also, the pictures kind of cut through your text. --[[User:Meh|Meh]] 06:40, 19 April 2012 (UTC)

== Didn't you notice? It says, at the start, that he is never supposed to have spoken of himself in first person. That is why, even though he is "speaking of himself" it is written in third person. That is also why it says, at the end, that he should maybe start to speak of himself in first person.[[User:Dekeo|Dekeo]] 20:32, 20 April 2012 (UTC)

== Writing a paper in first person is very difficult and makes for a hard to read page. I would much prefer to read a third person narrative on a persons life. This is good though and gives a lot of information on Confucious' life and teachings.[[User:Anonymous5|Anonymous5]] ([[User talk:Anonymous5|talk]]) 21:13, 27 February 2013 (CET) ==

Talk:Qin Shihuangdi

2013-02-28T20:02:40Z

Dr who:

=New comments in 2013=
Dear Emmanuel, I have uploaded your powerpoint presentation. Please revise the existing article. Now it is still too short. The final version should be 7 pages. You need to stick to the 1st person narrative ("I", "me" etc.) and not only describe things, but also switch to the commentator role (maybe indicated by "Contemporary Commentator" and then evaluate and discuss the topic from different angles, put it into context, criticize etc.). If you want to write less, you can integrate more pictures. Please make sure to indicate your source after each sentence or, if there is a whole paragraph with the same source, after each paragraph. You can indicate it like "Smith 2009:345" and in the final section "References" write the long version "Smith, Jared, Confucius revisted, Yale University Press 2009, 415 pp." In the edit mode, section headers are indicated with "=" and sub section headers with "==". In the edit mode, paragraphs need to be marked with 2 line feeds ("Enter" key). 1 Line feed will not show up as a paragraph. For additional editing tips, including how to indicate sources and how to find copyright free pictures, please refer to [http://wiki.vm.rub.de/uvu/index.php/uvu:Community_Portal]. Good luck with your composition! Best, [[User:Root|Root]] ([[User talk:Root|talk]]) 13:31, 25 February 2013 (CET)

== Long poem. I really don't like first person as it is really hard to keep going and not revert to third person at times. Content is good but choppy at times and needs filling out in places.[[User:Anonymous5|Anonymous5]] ([[User talk:Anonymous5|talk]]) 21:32, 27 February 2013 (CET)

I kind of liked the poem at the beginning. It is a little different approach. I agree that the content is good but a little choppy. You have done well though for using the first person throughout.[[User:Oprah wind fury| Oprah wind fury]] ([[User talk:Oprah wind fury|talk]]) 15:19, 27 February 2013 (MST)

Thanks for the comments! I'm still working on filling the holes and incorporating the existing article with my work. That is why it is so choppy. The poem in the beginning was there prior in the existing article, it is not my favorite part of the article and I am considering replacing it with a traditional introduction. [[User:Emmanuel R|Emmanuel R]] ([[User talk:Emmanuel R|talk]]) 05:45, 28 February 2013 (CET)

Qin Shi Huang is one of the most memorable figures that I've seen in this class. I like that you pointed out that China still bears the name of his dynasty. He's particularly memorable because of his terra cotta clay army. [[User:Dr who|Dr who]] ([[User talk:Dr who|talk]]) 28 February 2013 (CET)

=Old comments=
I'm sorry Professor, There is just no way I'm going to have this done by midnight. I just saved my most recent update and I will continue to work on this until I finish, but that will be some time after midnight, I'm afraid. I'll take whatever late penalty you feel is fair. I knew the deadline. I have no one but myself to blame for finishing late.[[User:Licia K|Licia K]] 07:04, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

= Scope =
I know, it's just a start. More pictures, words and citations will be added.[[User:Licia K|Licia K]] 05:33, 6 February 2012 (UTC)
:This is not even a start, it is just a stub. Can anybody help Licia with it? [[Special:Contributions/161.28.159.52|161.28.159.52]] 22:37, 24 February 2012 (UTC)
::Who is IP 161.28.159.52? Please login with your user name first! [[Special:Contributions/161.28.159.52|161.28.159.52]] 22:38, 24 February 2012 (UTC)

=Content=
Where is all that great information from your presentation? I feel that becoming a ruler at such a young age and accomplishing so much in such short time, a timeline of some sort would be very useful in putting Qin Shihuangdi's life in perpective. [[Jimmerica|Jimmerica]] 02:33, 3 March 2012 (UTC)
: I'm working on it- slowly, but I will get back to this article. Good idea about a time line- we'll have to see how it works out. [[User:Licia K|Licia K]] 09:12, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

Also, you should look into uploading the powerpoint, Then you could use different pictures in the article. And, don't forget to proof read the final article. But, definitely, finish writing this. You started almost a month ago and should be further along than you are- especially since the paper is due in less than 24 hours! [[User:Dekeo|Dekeo]] 09:53, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

If you put it in the perspective of Qin, you still need to address the faults of the Emperor, such as killing of philosophers, and the book burnings. [[User:Linksys|Linksys]] 17:48, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

The dates when Qin unified China are informative, but they do need to be tied into the rest of the page. Put it in a sentence or paragraph about his conquerings, this will help it make sense. [[User:Linksys|Linksys]] 05:09, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

= Credits =
*You have quoted from one of my books. Why don't you mention the sources? [[Special:Contributions/161.28.159.52|161.28.159.52]] 22:38, 24 February 2012 (UTC)
* Cite! Cite! Cite! [[User:Dekeo|Dekeo]] 09:53, 4 March 2012 (UTC)
After you get more content, you should add your references using MLA format. [[Jimmerica|Jimmerica]] 02:33, 3 March 2012 (UTC)
: Yup. It's in the works. I'm looking for better sources for the pictures (you know, free of copy-write issues.) [[User:Licia K|Licia K]] 09:12, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

== Wiki format? ==
I though that the information you had was good, but the format you used had no organized structure. The use of actual paragraphs would have been good and pictures to help get a better idea of what you are describing.
: I'm still working on this page.[[User:Licia K|Licia K]] 07:04, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

Talk:Mencius

2013-02-28T19:59:21Z

Dr who:

=New comments in 2013=
Dear Bill, this is a good start, but still too short. The final version should be 7 pages. You need to stick to the 1st person narrative ("I", "me" etc.) and not only describe things, but also switch to the commentator role (maybe indicated by "Contemporary Commentator" and then evaluate and discuss the topic from different angles, put it into context, criticize etc.). If you want to write less, you can integrate more pictures. Please make sure to indicate your source after each sentence or, if there is a whole paragraph with the same source, after each paragraph. You can indicate it like "Smith 2009:345" and in the final section "References" write the long version "Smith, Jared, Confucius revisted, Yale University Press 2009, 415 pp." In the edit mode, section headers are indicated with "=" and sub section headers with "==". In the edit mode, paragraphs need to be marked with 2 line feeds ("Enter" key). 1 Line feed will not show up as a paragraph. For additional editing tips, including how to indicate sources and how to find copyright free pictures, please refer to [http://wiki.vm.rub.de/uvu/index.php/uvu:Community_Portal]. Good luck with your composition! Best, [[User:Root|Root]] ([[User talk:Root|talk]]) 13:25, 25 February 2013 (CET)

==Did Mencius feel that he succeeded? It seems like everything he taught was ignored by these kings and rulers.[[User:Anonymous5|Anonymous5]] ([[User talk:Anonymous5|talk]]) 21:25, 27 February 2013 (CET)

I just want you to know that I used your page as a starting point for the code and format of mine. You are ahead of the curve. Look into working in the first person narrative into the article[[User:Oprah wind fury| Oprah wind fury]] ([[User talk:Oprah wind fury|talk]]) 15:12, 27 February 2013 (MST)

I really like the pictures you have, but adding some more wouldn't hurt and it would make your article look longer. [[User:Ratu|Ratu]] ([[User talk:Ratu|talk]]) 8:44, 28 February 2013 (CET)

I like how much attention to detail you put in about Mencius. I am a fan of that little triangle image, and the 4 characteristics of sympathy, shame, deference, and judgment.Dr_who (talk) 28 February 2013

=Old comments=
Dear Delon, please paste your reading in turn notes here. [[User:Root|Root]] 00:03, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

=comment=
My eyes hit a wall of text and now are bruised. --[[User:Checksum|Checksum]] 06:23, 19 April 2012 (UTC)

== Comment 2 ==
I already read too much stuff with no pictures and this has just killed my left eye (right one already dead). --[[User:Meh|Meh]] 06:43, 19 April 2012 (UTC)

Talk:Xunzi

2013-02-28T19:56:31Z

Dr who:

=New comments in 2013=
Dear Daniel, please start by uploading your powerpoint presentation and then revise the existing article. Now it is still too short. The final version should be 7 pages. You need to stick to the 1st person narrative ("I", "me" etc.) and not only describe things, but also switch to the commentator role (maybe indicated by "Contemporary Commentator" and then evaluate and discuss the topic from different angles, put it into context, criticize etc.). If you want to write less, you can integrate more pictures. Please make sure to indicate your source after each sentence or, if there is a whole paragraph with the same source, after each paragraph. You can indicate it like "Smith 2009:345" and in the final section "References" write the long version "Smith, Jared, Confucius revisted, Yale University Press 2009, 415 pp." In the edit mode, section headers are indicated with "=" and sub section headers with "==". In the edit mode, paragraphs need to be marked with 2 line feeds ("Enter" key). 1 Line feed will not show up as a paragraph. For additional editing tips, including how to indicate sources and how to find copyright free pictures, please refer to [http://wiki.vm.rub.de/uvu/index.php/uvu:Community_Portal]. Good luck with your composition! Best, [[User:Root|Root]] ([[User talk:Root|talk]]) 13:30, 25 February 2013 (CET)

The length is still too short. Work on the first person narrative. More pictures might help the length and feel of the article.[[User:Oprah wind fury| Oprah wind fury]] ([[User talk:Oprah wind fury|talk]]) 15:12, 27 February 2013 (MST)

I really like your incorporation of pictures, especially the sample text of Xunzi on the right side. This is probably the best page I've seen yet.[[User:Dr_who|Dr_who]] ([[User talk:Dr_who|talk]]) 28 February 2013

Talk:Later Han Dynasty

2013-02-28T19:54:50Z

Dr who:

=New comments in 2013=
Dear Colby, please start by uploading your powerpoint presentation and then revise the existing article. The final version should be 7 pages. You need to stick to the 1st person narrative ("I", "me" etc.) and not only describe things, but also switch to the commentator role (maybe indicated by "Contemporary Commentator" and then evaluate and discuss the topic from different angles, put it into context, criticize etc.). If you want to write less, you can integrate more pictures. Please make sure to indicate your source after each sentence or, if there is a whole paragraph with the same source, after each paragraph. You can indicate it like "Smith 2009:345" and in the final section "References" write the long version "Smith, Jared, Confucius revisted, Yale University Press 2009, 415 pp." In the edit mode, section headers are indicated with "=" and sub section headers with "==". In the edit mode, paragraphs need to be marked with 2 line feeds ("Enter" key). 1 Line feed will not show up as a paragraph. For additional editing tips, including how to indicate sources and how to find copyright free pictures, please refer to [http://wiki.vm.rub.de/uvu/index.php/uvu:Community_Portal]. Good luck with your composition! Best, [[User:Root|Root]] ([[User talk:Root|talk]]) 13:40, 25 February 2013 (CET)

It is blank... Refer to above comment for guidance. [[User:Oprah wind fury| Oprah wind fury]] ([[User talk:Oprah wind fury|talk]]) 15:12, 27 February 2013 (MST)

== I think it's a bit brief. That's probably because it needs. I like the relation you pointed out to the Roman Empire.[[User:Dr_who|Dr_who]] ([[User talk:Dr_who|talk]]) 28 February 2013

Talk:The Warring States Period

2013-02-28T19:52:55Z

Dr who:

== I would like to see how some of the ideologies mentioned affected the warring states rather than just listing them. This leaves a lot of loose ends for the reader to track down.[[User:Anonymous5|Anonymous5]] ([[User talk:Anonymous5|talk]]) 21:29, 27 February 2013 (CET)

Your presentation of information is nice. It does not look like it is long enough though and I'm not sure if you are still supposed to use the first person since your paper is about a period. I would email the professor about that. [[User:Oprah wind fury| Oprah wind fury]] ([[User talk:Oprah wind fury|talk]]) 15:12, 27 February 2013 (MST)

== I like your brevity and incorporation of pictures. It flowed well.[[User:Dr_who|Dr_who]] ([[User talk:Dr_who|talk]]) 28 February 2013