Talk:Kung Fu - Revision history

Hannah A: /* Picture book? */

2012-03-05T05:43:36Z

Picture book?

Hannah A: /* Picture book? */

2012-03-05T05:37:44Z

Picture book?

Hannah A: /* Picture book? */

2012-03-05T05:37:01Z

Picture book?

Hannah A: /* Picture book? */

2012-03-05T05:33:32Z

Picture book?

Hannah A: /* Picture book? */

2012-03-05T05:33:15Z

Picture book?

Buzhidao at 05:19, 5 March 2012

2012-03-05T05:19:54Z

Hannah A: /* References */

2012-03-05T03:55:23Z

References

Hannah A: /* References */

2012-03-05T03:18:24Z

References

Hannah A: /* Description vs. Arguments/original thoughts */

2012-03-04T19:19:58Z

Description vs. Arguments/original thoughts

Hannah A: /* Proof Read! */

2012-03-04T18:17:26Z

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 == Picture book? ==
 The information is great and very descriptive. I like the detail you used, however I feel that you used a heavy amount of pictures. I feel that you could have gotten your point across with less pictures, perhaps more descriptive words.
-:I suppose I felt like words can only go so far, and it is hard to describe something like the way the crane practitioner holds his/her hand and how a Hop Gar master would look when he/she is ready to fight. In martial arts these are things that can only be described by demonstration or picture. Most martial art books have short descriptions and then a picture to show how something should look exactly. So yes, they are picture books, and that is what I needed for my paper to demonstrate Kung Fu. :) Don't forget to sign your comments! [[User:Hannah A|Hannah A]] 05:33, 5 March 2012 (UTC)
+:I suppose I felt like words can only go so far, and it is hard to describe something like the way the crane practitioner holds his/her hand and how a Hop Gar master would look when he/she is ready to fight. In martial arts these are things that can only be described by demonstration or picture. Most martial art books have short descriptions and then a picture to show how something should look exactly. So yes, they are picture books, and that is what I needed for my paper to demonstrate Kung Fu. :) But maybe there would be a better way to organize them? Don't forget to sign your comments! [[User:Hannah A|Hannah A]] 05:33, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

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 == Picture book? ==
 The information is great and very descriptive. I like the detail you used, however I feel that you used a heavy amount of pictures. I feel that you could have gotten your point across with less pictures, perhaps more descriptive words.
-:I suppose I felt like words can only go so far, and it is hard to describe something like the way the crane practitioner holds his/her hand and how a Hop Gar master would look when he/she is ready to fight. In martial arts these are things that can only be described by demonstration or picture. Most martial art books have short descriptions and then a picture to show how something should look exactly. So yes, they are picture books, and that is what was required for my paper. :) Don't forget to sign your comments! [[User:Hannah A|Hannah A]] 05:33, 5 March 2012 (UTC)
+:I suppose I felt like words can only go so far, and it is hard to describe something like the way the crane practitioner holds his/her hand and how a Hop Gar master would look when he/she is ready to fight. In martial arts these are things that can only be described by demonstration or picture. Most martial art books have short descriptions and then a picture to show how something should look exactly. So yes, they are picture books, and that is what I needed for my paper to demonstrate Kung Fu. :) Don't forget to sign your comments! [[User:Hannah A|Hannah A]] 05:33, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

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 == Picture book? ==
 The information is great and very descriptive. I like the detail you used, however I feel that you used a heavy amount of pictures. I feel that you could have gotten your point across with less pictures, perhaps more descriptive words.
-:I suppose I felt like words can only go so far, and it is hard to describe something like the way the crane practitioner holds their hand and how a Hop Gar master would look when he/she is ready to fight. In martial arts these are things that can only be described by demonstration or picture. [[User:Hannah A|Hannah A]] 05:33, 5 March 2012 (UTC)
+:I suppose I felt like words can only go so far, and it is hard to describe something like the way the crane practitioner holds his/her hand and how a Hop Gar master would look when he/she is ready to fight. In martial arts these are things that can only be described by demonstration or picture. Most martial art books have short descriptions and then a picture to show how something should look exactly. So yes, they are picture books, and that is what was required for my paper. :) Don't forget to sign your comments! [[User:Hannah A|Hannah A]] 05:33, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

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 == Picture book? ==
 The information is great and very descriptive. I like the detail you used, however I feel that you used a heavy amount of pictures. I feel that you could have gotten your point across with less pictures, perhaps more descriptive words.
-:I suppose I felt like words can only go so far, and it is hard to describe something like the way the crane practitioner holds their hand and how a Hop Gar master would look when he/she is ready to fight. In martial arts these are things that can only be described by demonstration or picture.
+:I suppose I felt like words can only go so far, and it is hard to describe something like the way the crane practitioner holds their hand and how a Hop Gar master would look when he/she is ready to fight. In martial arts these are things that can only be described by demonstration or picture. [[User:Hannah A|Hannah A]] 05:33, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

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	The information is great and very descriptive. I like the detail you used, however I feel that you used a heavy amount of pictures. I feel that you could have gotten your point across with less pictures, perhaps more descriptive words.		The information is great and very descriptive. I like the detail you used, however I feel that you used a heavy amount of pictures. I feel that you could have gotten your point across with less pictures, perhaps more descriptive words.
		+	:I suppose I felt like words can only go so far, and it is hard to describe something like the way the crane practitioner holds their hand and how a Hop Gar master would look when he/she is ready to fight. In martial arts these are things that can only be described by demonstration or picture.

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 =Copyright issues of film clips=
 I will be adding citations soon, also, if anyone sees this, can I put that Avatar clip on here, or would there be copyright issues? [[User:Hannah A|Hannah A]] 02:22, 1 March 2012 (UTC)
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 Little things, like china instead of China (should always be capitalized), punctuation and the flow of your sentences. Some of them are written rather awkwardly. Try reading your paper out loud. Sometimes that helps you find the awkward spots. (Check out the paragraph just before the section on two systems- the one about philosophy) [[User:Dekeo|Dekeo]] 09:29, 4 March 2012 (UTC)
 : Thank you! I fixed the China capitalization, and I am currently working on making my sentences less awkward. [[User:Hannah A|Hannah A]] 18:17, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

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 *You need to list your references.  [[Jimmerica|Jimmerica]] 02:29, 3 March 2012 (UTC)
 * And don't forget your citations in the body of your paper. [[User:Dekeo|Dekeo]] 09:29, 4 March 2012 (UTC)
-:Done! :)
+:Done! :) [[User:Hannah A|Hannah A]] 03:55, 5 March 2012 (UTC)
 = Proof Read! =
 Little things, like china instead of China (should always be capitalized), punctuation and the flow of your sentences. Some of them are written rather awkwardly. Try reading your paper out loud. Sometimes that helps you find the awkward spots. (Check out the paragraph just before the section on two systems- the one about philosophy) [[User:Dekeo|Dekeo]] 09:29, 4 March 2012 (UTC)
 : Thank you! I fixed the China capitalization, and I am currently working on making my sentences less awkward. [[User:Hannah A|Hannah A]] 18:17, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

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 :Who wrote this? [[Special:Contributions/161.28.159.52|161.28.159.52]] 22:19, 2 March 2012 (UTC)
 Perhaps an opening paragraph before the 'contents' box would give you a chance to introduce your topic and establish a thesis? [[Jimmerica]] 02:31, 3 March 2012 (UTC)
 Have a thesis to create a better argumentive paper.[[User:Linksys|Linksys]] 18:08, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

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	Little things, like china instead of China (should always be capitalized), punctuation and the flow of your sentences. Some of them are written rather awkwardly. Try reading your paper out loud. Sometimes that helps you find the awkward spots. (Check out the paragraph just before the section on two systems- the one about philosophy) [[User:Dekeo\|Dekeo]] 09:29, 4 March 2012 (UTC)		Little things, like china instead of China (should always be capitalized), punctuation and the flow of your sentences. Some of them are written rather awkwardly. Try reading your paper out loud. Sometimes that helps you find the awkward spots. (Check out the paragraph just before the section on two systems- the one about philosophy) [[User:Dekeo\|Dekeo]] 09:29, 4 March 2012 (UTC)
		+	: Thank you! I fixed the China capitalization, and I am currently working on making my sentences less awkward. [[User:Hannah A\|Hannah A]] 18:17, 4 March 2012 (UTC)