Talk:Qin Shihuangdi - Revision history

Root at 17:27, 4 March 2013

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Dekeo: /* New comments in 2013 */

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Leo1299 at 02:11, 1 March 2013

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Dr who at 20:02, 28 February 2013

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Root at 12:31, 25 February 2013

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Licia K at 07:18, 5 March 2012

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 Dear Emmanuel, I have uploaded your powerpoint presentation. Please revise the existing article. Now it is still too short. The final version should be 7 pages. You need to stick to the 1st person narrative ("I", "me" etc.) and not only describe things, but also switch to the commentator role (maybe indicated by "Contemporary Commentator" and then evaluate and discuss the topic from different angles, put it into context, criticize etc.). If you want to write less, you can integrate more pictures. Please make sure to indicate your source after each sentence or, if there is a whole paragraph with the same source, after each paragraph. You can indicate it like "Smith 2009:345" and in the final section "References" write the long version "Smith, Jared, Confucius revisted, Yale University Press 2009, 415 pp." In the edit mode, section headers are indicated with "=" and sub section headers with "==". In the edit mode, paragraphs need to be marked with 2 line feeds ("Enter" key). 1 Line feed will not show up as a paragraph. For additional editing tips, including how to indicate sources and how to find copyright free pictures, please refer to [http://wiki.vm.rub.de/uvu/index.php/uvu:Community_Portal]. Good luck with your composition! Best, [[User:Root|Root]] ([[User talk:Root|talk]]) 13:31, 25 February 2013 (CET)
-== Long poem. I really don't like first person as it is really hard to keep going and not revert to third person at times. Content is good but choppy at times and needs filling out in places.[[User:Anonymous5|Anonymous5]] ([[User talk:Anonymous5|talk]]) 21:32, 27 February 2013 (CET)
+:Long poem. I really don't like first person as it is really hard to keep going and not revert to third person at times. Content is good but choppy at times and needs filling out in places.[[User:Anonymous5|Anonymous5]] ([[User talk:Anonymous5|talk]]) 21:32, 27 February 2013 (CET)
 I kind of liked the poem at the beginning. It is a little different approach. I agree that the content is good but a little choppy. You have done well though for using the first person throughout.[[User:Oprah wind fury| Oprah wind fury]] ([[User talk:Oprah wind fury|talk]]) 15:19, 27 February 2013 (MST)

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 Qin Shi Huang is one of the most memorable figures that I've seen in this class.  I like that you pointed out that China still bears the name of his dynasty.  He's particularly memorable because of his terra cotta clay army. [[User:Dr who|Dr who]] ([[User talk:Dr who|talk]]) 28 February 2013 (CET)
 I think it's looking pretty good. I kind of think a picture of the painting of him that got the artist killed would be nice touch. [[User:Leo1299|Leo1299]] ([[User talk:Leo1299|talk]]) 03:11, 1 March 2013 (CET)
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	Qin Shi Huang is one of the most memorable figures that I've seen in this class. I like that you pointed out that China still bears the name of his dynasty. He's particularly memorable because of his terra cotta clay army. [[User:Dr who\|Dr who]] ([[User talk:Dr who\|talk]]) 28 February 2013 (CET)		Qin Shi Huang is one of the most memorable figures that I've seen in this class. I like that you pointed out that China still bears the name of his dynasty. He's particularly memorable because of his terra cotta clay army. [[User:Dr who\|Dr who]] ([[User talk:Dr who\|talk]]) 28 February 2013 (CET)
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		+	I think it's looking pretty good. I kind of think a picture of the painting of him that got the artist killed would be nice touch. [[User:Leo1299\|Leo1299]] ([[User talk:Leo1299\|talk]]) 03:11, 1 March 2013 (CET)

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	Thanks for the comments! I'm still working on filling the holes and incorporating the existing article with my work. That is why it is so choppy. The poem in the beginning was there prior in the existing article, it is not my favorite part of the article and I am considering replacing it with a traditional introduction. [[User:Emmanuel R\|Emmanuel R]] ([[User talk:Emmanuel R\|talk]]) 05:45, 28 February 2013 (CET)		Thanks for the comments! I'm still working on filling the holes and incorporating the existing article with my work. That is why it is so choppy. The poem in the beginning was there prior in the existing article, it is not my favorite part of the article and I am considering replacing it with a traditional introduction. [[User:Emmanuel R\|Emmanuel R]] ([[User talk:Emmanuel R\|talk]]) 05:45, 28 February 2013 (CET)
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		+	Qin Shi Huang is one of the most memorable figures that I've seen in this class. I like that you pointed out that China still bears the name of his dynasty. He's particularly memorable because of his terra cotta clay army. [[User:Dr who\|Dr who]] ([[User talk:Dr who\|talk]]) 28 February 2013 (CET)

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	I kind of liked the poem at the beginning. It is a little different approach. I agree that the content is good but a little choppy. You have done well though for using the first person throughout.[[User:Oprah wind fury\| Oprah wind fury]] ([[User talk:Oprah wind fury\|talk]]) 15:19, 27 February 2013 (MST)		I kind of liked the poem at the beginning. It is a little different approach. I agree that the content is good but a little choppy. You have done well though for using the first person throughout.[[User:Oprah wind fury\| Oprah wind fury]] ([[User talk:Oprah wind fury\|talk]]) 15:19, 27 February 2013 (MST)
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		+	Thanks for the comments! I'm still working on filling the holes and incorporating the existing article with my work. That is why it is so choppy. The poem in the beginning was there prior in the existing article, it is not my favorite part of the article and I am considering replacing it with a traditional introduction. [[User:Emmanuel R\|Emmanuel R]] ([[User talk:Emmanuel R\|talk]]) 05:45, 28 February 2013 (CET)

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	== Long poem. I really don't like first person as it is really hard to keep going and not revert to third person at times. Content is good but choppy at times and needs filling out in places.[[User:Anonymous5\|Anonymous5]] ([[User talk:Anonymous5\|talk]]) 21:32, 27 February 2013 (CET)		== Long poem. I really don't like first person as it is really hard to keep going and not revert to third person at times. Content is good but choppy at times and needs filling out in places.[[User:Anonymous5\|Anonymous5]] ([[User talk:Anonymous5\|talk]]) 21:32, 27 February 2013 (CET)
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		+	I kind of liked the poem at the beginning. It is a little different approach. I agree that the content is good but a little choppy. You have done well though for using the first person throughout.[[User:Oprah wind fury\| Oprah wind fury]] ([[User talk:Oprah wind fury\|talk]]) 15:19, 27 February 2013 (MST)

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		+	Dear Emmanuel, I have uploaded your powerpoint presentation. Please revise the existing article. Now it is still too short. The final version should be 7 pages. You need to stick to the 1st person narrative ("I", "me" etc.) and not only describe things, but also switch to the commentator role (maybe indicated by "Contemporary Commentator" and then evaluate and discuss the topic from different angles, put it into context, criticize etc.). If you want to write less, you can integrate more pictures. Please make sure to indicate your source after each sentence or, if there is a whole paragraph with the same source, after each paragraph. You can indicate it like "Smith 2009:345" and in the final section "References" write the long version "Smith, Jared, Confucius revisted, Yale University Press 2009, 415 pp." In the edit mode, section headers are indicated with "=" and sub section headers with "==". In the edit mode, paragraphs need to be marked with 2 line feeds ("Enter" key). 1 Line feed will not show up as a paragraph. For additional editing tips, including how to indicate sources and how to find copyright free pictures, please refer to [http://wiki.vm.rub.de/uvu/index.php/uvu:Community_Portal]. Good luck with your composition! Best, [[User:Root\|Root]] ([[User talk:Root\|talk]]) 13:31, 25 February 2013 (CET)
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	I'm sorry Professor, There is just no way I'm going to have this done by midnight. I just saved my most recent update and I will continue to work on this until I finish, but that will be some time after midnight, I'm afraid. I'll take whatever late penalty you feel is fair. I knew the deadline. I have no one but myself to blame for finishing late.[[User:Licia K\|Licia K]] 07:04, 5 March 2012 (UTC)		I'm sorry Professor, There is just no way I'm going to have this done by midnight. I just saved my most recent update and I will continue to work on this until I finish, but that will be some time after midnight, I'm afraid. I'll take whatever late penalty you feel is fair. I knew the deadline. I have no one but myself to blame for finishing late.[[User:Licia K\|Licia K]] 07:04, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

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−	I'm sorry Professor, There is just no way I'm going to have this done by midnight. I just saved my most recent update and I will continue to work on this until I finish, but that will be some time after midnight, I'm afraid.[[User:Licia K\|Licia K]] 07:04, 5 March 2012 (UTC)	+	I'm sorry Professor, There is just no way I'm going to have this done by midnight. I just saved my most recent update and I will continue to work on this until I finish, but that will be some time after midnight, I'm afraid. I'll take whatever late penalty you feel is fair. I knew the deadline. I have no one but myself to blame for finishing late.[[User:Licia K\|Licia K]] 07:04, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

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