Talk:Terra Cotta Army - Revision history

Oprah wind fury at 05:31, 16 April 2013

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Root at 12:36, 25 February 2013

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Kovenor at 21:42, 18 April 2012

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Chris1 at 05:29, 5 March 2012

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	No link to the original source to the pictures.. and maybe add one more reference? [[User:Kovenor\|Kovenor]] 21:42, 18 April 2012 (UTC)		No link to the original source to the pictures.. and maybe add one more reference? [[User:Kovenor\|Kovenor]] 21:42, 18 April 2012 (UTC)
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		+	I think adding some more academic sources would be a good addition to the article. The information is good though. [[User:Oprah wind fury\| Oprah wind fury]]([[User:Oprah wind fury\|talk]]) 23:30, 15 April 2013 (MST)

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	Dear Bill, please start by uploading your powerpoint presentation and then revise the existing article. Now it is still too short. The final version should be 7 pages. You need not only to describe things, but also switch to the commentator role (maybe indicated by "Contemporary Commentator" and then evaluate and discuss the topic from different angles, put it into context, criticize etc.). If you want to write less, you can integrate more pictures. Please make sure to indicate your source after each sentence or, if there is a whole paragraph with the same source, after each paragraph. You can indicate it like "Smith 2009:345" and in the final section "References" write the long version "Smith, Jared, Confucius revisted, Yale University Press 2009, 415 pp." In the edit mode, section headers are indicated with "=" and sub section headers with "==". In the edit mode, paragraphs need to be marked with 2 line feeds ("Enter" key). 1 Line feed will not show up as a paragraph. For additional editing tips, including how to indicate sources and how to find copyright free pictures, please refer to [http://wiki.vm.rub.de/uvu/index.php/uvu:Community_Portal]. Good luck with your composition! Best, [[User:Root\|Root]] ([[User talk:Root\|talk]]) 13:36, 25 February 2013 (CET)		Dear Bill, please start by uploading your powerpoint presentation and then revise the existing article. Now it is still too short. The final version should be 7 pages. You need not only to describe things, but also switch to the commentator role (maybe indicated by "Contemporary Commentator" and then evaluate and discuss the topic from different angles, put it into context, criticize etc.). If you want to write less, you can integrate more pictures. Please make sure to indicate your source after each sentence or, if there is a whole paragraph with the same source, after each paragraph. You can indicate it like "Smith 2009:345" and in the final section "References" write the long version "Smith, Jared, Confucius revisted, Yale University Press 2009, 415 pp." In the edit mode, section headers are indicated with "=" and sub section headers with "==". In the edit mode, paragraphs need to be marked with 2 line feeds ("Enter" key). 1 Line feed will not show up as a paragraph. For additional editing tips, including how to indicate sources and how to find copyright free pictures, please refer to [http://wiki.vm.rub.de/uvu/index.php/uvu:Community_Portal]. Good luck with your composition! Best, [[User:Root\|Root]] ([[User talk:Root\|talk]]) 13:36, 25 February 2013 (CET)

		+	I like all the information you have, and all the pictures. Looks good! [[User:Leo1299\|Leo1299]] ([[User talk:Leo1299\|talk]]) 07:01, 16 April 2013 (CEST)
	I really like your article Bill, I think organizing things a little differently might help, but excellent material and pictures :). [[User:ThaHamburglar\|ThaHamburglar]]		I really like your article Bill, I think organizing things a little differently might help, but excellent material and pictures :). [[User:ThaHamburglar\|ThaHamburglar]]

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 Dear Bill, please start by uploading your powerpoint presentation and then revise the existing article. Now it is still too short. The final version should be 7 pages. You need not only to describe things, but also switch to the commentator role (maybe indicated by "Contemporary Commentator" and then evaluate and discuss the topic from different angles, put it into context, criticize etc.). If you want to write less, you can integrate more pictures. Please make sure to indicate your source after each sentence or, if there is a whole paragraph with the same source, after each paragraph. You can indicate it like "Smith 2009:345" and in the final section "References" write the long version "Smith, Jared, Confucius revisted, Yale University Press 2009, 415 pp." In the edit mode, section headers are indicated with "=" and sub section headers with "==". In the edit mode, paragraphs need to be marked with 2 line feeds ("Enter" key). 1 Line feed will not show up as a paragraph. For additional editing tips, including how to indicate sources and how to find copyright free pictures, please refer to [http://wiki.vm.rub.de/uvu/index.php/uvu:Community_Portal]. Good luck with your composition! Best, [[User:Root|Root]] ([[User talk:Root|talk]]) 13:36, 25 February 2013 (CET)
 ==There seems to be a lot of question about what is actually there (tomb) and what is legend or hear say. Clarifying material?[[User:Anonymous5|Anonymous5]] ([[User talk:Anonymous5|talk]]) 21:16, 27 February 2013 (CET)==

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 Dear Bill, please start by uploading your powerpoint presentation and then revise the existing article. Now it is still too short. The final version should be 7 pages. You need not only to describe things, but also switch to the commentator role (maybe indicated by "Contemporary Commentator" and then evaluate and discuss the topic from different angles, put it into context, criticize etc.). If you want to write less, you can integrate more pictures. Please make sure to indicate your source after each sentence or, if there is a whole paragraph with the same source, after each paragraph. You can indicate it like "Smith 2009:345" and in the final section "References" write the long version "Smith, Jared, Confucius revisted, Yale University Press 2009, 415 pp." In the edit mode, section headers are indicated with "=" and sub section headers with "==". In the edit mode, paragraphs need to be marked with 2 line feeds ("Enter" key). 1 Line feed will not show up as a paragraph. For additional editing tips, including how to indicate sources and how to find copyright free pictures, please refer to [http://wiki.vm.rub.de/uvu/index.php/uvu:Community_Portal]. Good luck with your composition! Best, [[User:Root|Root]] ([[User talk:Root|talk]]) 13:36, 25 February 2013 (CET)
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		+	Dear Bill, please start by uploading your powerpoint presentation and then revise the existing article. Now it is still too short. The final version should be 7 pages. You need not only to describe things, but also switch to the commentator role (maybe indicated by "Contemporary Commentator" and then evaluate and discuss the topic from different angles, put it into context, criticize etc.). If you want to write less, you can integrate more pictures. Please make sure to indicate your source after each sentence or, if there is a whole paragraph with the same source, after each paragraph. You can indicate it like "Smith 2009:345" and in the final section "References" write the long version "Smith, Jared, Confucius revisted, Yale University Press 2009, 415 pp." In the edit mode, section headers are indicated with "=" and sub section headers with "==". In the edit mode, paragraphs need to be marked with 2 line feeds ("Enter" key). 1 Line feed will not show up as a paragraph. For additional editing tips, including how to indicate sources and how to find copyright free pictures, please refer to [http://wiki.vm.rub.de/uvu/index.php/uvu:Community_Portal]. Good luck with your composition! Best, [[User:Root\|Root]] ([[User talk:Root\|talk]]) 13:36, 25 February 2013 (CET)
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	You should add your references using MLA format. [[Jimmerica\|Jimmerica]] 02:27, 3 March 2012 (UTC)		You should add your references using MLA format. [[Jimmerica\|Jimmerica]] 02:27, 3 March 2012 (UTC)

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	And say why they haven't uncovered the rest of the burial place.[[User:Linksys\|Linksys]] 18:00, 4 March 2012 (UTC)		And say why they haven't uncovered the rest of the burial place.[[User:Linksys\|Linksys]] 18:00, 4 March 2012 (UTC)
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		+	No link to the original source to the pictures.. and maybe add one more reference? [[User:Kovenor\|Kovenor]] 21:42, 18 April 2012 (UTC)

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 If you are looking for more content, I think it may be interesting to read more about the production process- what terra cotta is, how it is made, and how each soldier was assembled. Also, what kept this artwork preserved for such a long period of time.  [[Jimmerica|Jimmerica]] 02:28, 3 March 2012 (UTC)
 Another comment on Content, where is your argument? So far, this is just a description of what happened. And, be sure to proofread this. You have some punctuation issues and many of your sentences don't make sense, the way they are written. Try reading it out loud, I think you'll see what I mean. [[User:Dekeo|Dekeo]] 09:21, 4 March 2012 (UTC)
 Add the video you found on youtube. Also, I can see your statement on the top that this is one of the greatest discoveries, but where is the content to support that strong statement? Be more descriptive in the size of the army and where it is kept. It would be good to describe the surrounding area or that there are possibly more armies and the tomb of Qin on that land. [[User:Linksys|Linksys]] 17:59, 4 March 2012 (UTC)
 And say why they haven't uncovered the rest of the burial place.[[User:Linksys|Linksys]] 18:00, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

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	Add the video you found on youtube. Also, I can see your statement on the top that this is one of the greatest discoveries, but where is the content to support that strong statement? Be more descriptive in the size of the army and where it is kept. It would be good to describe the surrounding area or that there are possibly more armies and the tomb of Qin on that land. [[User:Linksys\|Linksys]] 17:59, 4 March 2012 (UTC)		Add the video you found on youtube. Also, I can see your statement on the top that this is one of the greatest discoveries, but where is the content to support that strong statement? Be more descriptive in the size of the army and where it is kept. It would be good to describe the surrounding area or that there are possibly more armies and the tomb of Qin on that land. [[User:Linksys\|Linksys]] 17:59, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

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	Add the video you found on youtube. Also, I can see your statement on the top that this is one of the greatest discoveries, but where is the content to support that strong statement? Be more descriptive in the size of the army and where it is kept. It would be good to describe the surrounding area or that there are possibly more armies and the tomb of Qin on that land. [[User:Linksys\|Linksys]] 17:59, 4 March 2012 (UTC)		Add the video you found on youtube. Also, I can see your statement on the top that this is one of the greatest discoveries, but where is the content to support that strong statement? Be more descriptive in the size of the army and where it is kept. It would be good to describe the surrounding area or that there are possibly more armies and the tomb of Qin on that land. [[User:Linksys\|Linksys]] 17:59, 4 March 2012 (UTC)
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	:And say why they haven't uncovered the rest of the burial place.[[User:Linksys\|Linksys]] 18:00, 4 March 2012 (UTC)		:And say why they haven't uncovered the rest of the burial place.[[User:Linksys\|Linksys]] 18:00, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

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	Add the video you found on youtube. Also, I can see your statement on the top that this is one of the greatest discoveries, but where is the content to support that strong statement? Be more descriptive in the size of the army and where it is kept. It would be good to describe the surrounding area or that there are possibly more armies and the tomb of Qin on that land. [[User:Linksys\|Linksys]] 17:59, 4 March 2012 (UTC)		Add the video you found on youtube. Also, I can see your statement on the top that this is one of the greatest discoveries, but where is the content to support that strong statement? Be more descriptive in the size of the army and where it is kept. It would be good to describe the surrounding area or that there are possibly more armies and the tomb of Qin on that land. [[User:Linksys\|Linksys]] 17:59, 4 March 2012 (UTC)
		+	:And say why they haven't uncovered the rest of the burial place.[[User:Linksys\|Linksys]] 18:00, 4 March 2012 (UTC)