Talk:Ouyang Xiu

I'm Sorry Professor, but, I'm afraid there is no way I'll have this finished by midnight. I've saved my most recent work and I'll keep working on both my papers until they are done. I'll take whatever late penalty you decide is fair.Licia K 07:12, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

Suggestions

Hello!

The poem, White Egret, seems to have every other line in a giant box. I don't think this is what you intended! I'll post more comments when they arise. Thanks~

--Checksum 18:34, 3 March 2012 (UTC)

I really like the style, it is very comforting and nice. I think you need to length some segments. You said you'll talk about how you were a writer and literary critic but that didn't really develop well. There is also a broken picture, I'm sure you'll fix that in no time. Besides that I'm really liking how its going. --Checksum 03:34, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

Thanks for the vote of confidence, and the note about the picture. I'm still working on this. I'm afraid it is taking a lot longer than I expected.Licia K 07:14, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

Instead of a simple list of facts, I think your paper should read more like an essay, with full sentences and paragraphs. Name 07:51, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

Also, what is your thesis statement? I think it would be good if you put your thesis in the introduction, and then tried to carry it into each of your sections, and then made a final conclusion combining your mini conclusions from each sections. Name 07:54, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

I'm working on it- My thesis statement is still a little vague but it is in there- just not in the intro- next section. Hopefully, by the time I finish, the argument will seem clear. Right now, I think there will be two "conclusions" one for the first person part and one for the over all paper- and there, I plan to recap the paper's argument. Thanks for your suggestions.I need all the help I can get! Licia K 08:47, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

Alchemist1330

maybe add in a little section that you argue something with, i'm not sure what or maybe have a section by you that you analyze one of his peoem and support your claims, which i think is an argument. anyway like it allot. If you want you can have more picture but i like the airy look. also add a works cited or references at the bottom i can't see any

I added a references tab so you can get started :)!

Thanks! This is taking a lot longer than I hoped it would.Licia K 07:09, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

Comment 6

Nice work so far. It would be nice to have some more pictures~ Also, one of the lines of the poem is formatted weirdly, maybe fix that? --Whatisthis 03:54, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

I'm still working on this. Thanks for the heads up.Licia K 07:08, 5 March 2012 (UTC)