Talk:Liang Qichao

I like this guy

Why don't you write something about his great achievement in literature? Root 18:38, 10 October 2011 (UTC)

I would like you to write more about Liang Qichao's emotions, using quotes if you can find them. Liang was a very passionate man. How do you think he felt when he failed his Jinshi examination? Tell about his admiration of Kang Youwei. There were many times in which he must have been very disappointed in the path China was taking, please write passionately about his despair. Was he optimistic or pessimistic about China's future? Adding just a few sentences using emotionally charged words will help bring this paper to life.:) Dei 05:30, 15 October 2011 (UTC)

This site [1] has some interesting quotes on Liang's opinion on race which are very informative. Dei 05:32, 15 October 2011 (UTC)

You have some good info, but the mechanics of your writing are distracting. Here are some other suggestions to improve you paper:

-I suggest you re-read the article and check the spelling ("travelling" for example only has 1 "L").

-Try to avoid passive sentences- use active verbs- I wrote..., I argued..., I did... instead of I have written..., I have argued..., I have done...

-Keep an eye on your use of tense also- don't switch from past tense to present tense in the same sentence.

-It is OK to break up your sentences into smaller parts. This will help you avoid "run on" sentences. (Kang and I advocated reform.(period)Then continue the sentence)

-Make sure you complete your thoughts. You included this sentence in your article- "However, American's have their own as well." - their own what?)

-and check for confusing sentences like this one from your article "My critics say I was I feel..." which was it? "I was" or "I feel"?

Proofreading- not the worlds funnest activity, but it really helps your writing. :)Dekeo 19:46, 21 October 2011 (UTC)