Talk:Tao Yuanming

New comments in 2013

Jenny, nicely done. I especially like the two poems presented side by side for an interesting comparison of translations. The article is a little short but full of a lot of good information. good work though! --Chameleon (talk) 03:02, 2 March 2013 (CET)

Jenny! I liked the order in which you provided your information. It was a good and logical outline. I would be more interested in reading more about his life in narrative form. I feel that it might satsify the first person narrative direction we have been asked to do a bit more. Also I noticed that you only signed your name after the biography, I could be wrong but I was under the impression we needed to sign our name after each section we added to or narrated. But don't take my word for it. Also some more images might be a good idea. Samantha S (talk) 23:31, 28 February 2013 (CET)

Dear Jenny, please correct your link to your powerpoint presentation (it does not work yet) and still work on the article. Now it is still a little bit too descriptive and too short. The final version should be 7 pages without the earlier contributor's part. The two long poems are good, but do not count as part of the paper. Please do not only describe things, but also switch to the commentator role (maybe indicated by "Contemporary Commentator" and then evaluate and discuss the topic from different angles, put it into context, criticize etc.). If you want to write less, you can integrate more pictures. Please make sure to indicate your source after each sentence or, if there is a whole paragraph with the same source, after each paragraph. You can indicate it like "Smith 2009:345" and in the final section "References" write the long version "Smith, Jared, Confucius revisted, Yale University Press 2009, 415 pp." In the edit mode, section headers are indicated with "=" and sub section headers with "==". In the edit mode, paragraphs need to be marked with 2 line feeds ("Enter" key). 1 Line feed will not show up as a paragraph. For additional editing tips, including how to indicate sources and how to find copyright free pictures, please refer to [1]. Good luck with your composition! Best, Root (talk) 13:50, 25 February 2013 (CET)

Jenny, It is a pretty good page with lots of information. I think that if you gave a biography that consisted of more than just bullet points that would be more interesting to read. More pictures would also be pretty great to look at while reading. Tao Yuanming was super cool and you do a good job of showing that. A Nonny Mouse (talk) 00:41, 28 February 2013 (CET)

Jenny, to add your powerpoint, you need to click on the red link and upload it there, like what you do with pictures. I think that you could expand a lot of your paragraphs and points to give greater understanding. --MerchantThief (talk) 07:14, 28 February 2013 (CET)

Should use more pictures and make the page a bit more visually appealing. Otherwise, this is awesome. Ignatius J Reilly (talk) 22:00, 1 March 2013 (CET)

Old comments

I really like this page ummm maybe use some paraenthetical citations though im not sure if we are required to use them. Alchemist 1330

Comment 2

Perhaps separate the presentation from your references? Because I don't think, the powerpoint is a reference... I'm not sure though. --Meh 07:08, 19 April 2012 (UTC)