Difference between revisions of "Talk:Jackie Chan"
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| + | Dear Robert, your contribution in this article is not enough for a midterm paper. You left almost the entire original article there and added some text in the beginning and your powerpoint at the end. I will give you a "pass" grade, but only because I hope that you continue to work on this article to improve it during the rest of the semester. Also, please adjust the references for the pictures to our standard as seen in the article [[Qu Yuan]]. I think, you did not have enough time to work on it, because you even did not change the "he" into "I". So still some work to do, not only formal, but you need to add some important points. Thank you. Best, [[User:Root|Root]] ([[User talk:Root|talk]]) 01:16, 5 March 2013 (CET) | ||
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Really great start with tons of really interesting and useful information. I think you are supposed to write the article in the same way you are presenting by referring to yourself as "I" When referring to Jackie Chan. I really like the section where you list out his different injuries. He really is such an interesting guy with such an interesting film career. Maybe offer some more pictures and also maybe some video clips of some of Jackies best moments in action. [[User:A Nonny Mouse|A Nonny Mouse]] ([[User talk:A Nonny Mouse|talk]]) 01:25, 28 February 2013 (CET) | Really great start with tons of really interesting and useful information. I think you are supposed to write the article in the same way you are presenting by referring to yourself as "I" When referring to Jackie Chan. I really like the section where you list out his different injuries. He really is such an interesting guy with such an interesting film career. Maybe offer some more pictures and also maybe some video clips of some of Jackies best moments in action. [[User:A Nonny Mouse|A Nonny Mouse]] ([[User talk:A Nonny Mouse|talk]]) 01:25, 28 February 2013 (CET) | ||
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I agree, the biography section is a bit long and intimidating. Perhaps split it up in to phases of life (i.e. Early Life, Acting Career, etc.). I'd also like to see some more analysis of what makes Jackie Chan so popular in America compared to other martial arts actors. It would also be really interesting to see come kind of analysis of one of his films. You could also take the section about Qualities of Jackie Chan Films and show how those qualities appear throughout his works. You make brief mention of them, but for the most part you have to have actually seen some Jackie Chan films first to really understand what you're talking about. --[[User:Professor Wiskers McMeowmouth|Professor Wiskers McMeowmouth]] ([[User talk:Professor Wiskers McMeowmouth|talk]]) 22:26, 1 March 2013 (CET) | I agree, the biography section is a bit long and intimidating. Perhaps split it up in to phases of life (i.e. Early Life, Acting Career, etc.). I'd also like to see some more analysis of what makes Jackie Chan so popular in America compared to other martial arts actors. It would also be really interesting to see come kind of analysis of one of his films. You could also take the section about Qualities of Jackie Chan Films and show how those qualities appear throughout his works. You make brief mention of them, but for the most part you have to have actually seen some Jackie Chan films first to really understand what you're talking about. --[[User:Professor Wiskers McMeowmouth|Professor Wiskers McMeowmouth]] ([[User talk:Professor Wiskers McMeowmouth|talk]]) 22:26, 1 March 2013 (CET) | ||
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| + | It isn't easy to make someone else's work your own, but I think you are well on the way. Yes, this would sound great in first person! I look forward to the finished project.--[[User:Dekeo|Dekeo]] ([[User talk:Dekeo|talk]]) 07:31, 2 March 2013 (CET) | ||
Latest revision as of 02:16, 5 March 2013
Dear Robert, your contribution in this article is not enough for a midterm paper. You left almost the entire original article there and added some text in the beginning and your powerpoint at the end. I will give you a "pass" grade, but only because I hope that you continue to work on this article to improve it during the rest of the semester. Also, please adjust the references for the pictures to our standard as seen in the article Qu Yuan. I think, you did not have enough time to work on it, because you even did not change the "he" into "I". So still some work to do, not only formal, but you need to add some important points. Thank you. Best, Root (talk) 01:16, 5 March 2013 (CET)
Really great start with tons of really interesting and useful information. I think you are supposed to write the article in the same way you are presenting by referring to yourself as "I" When referring to Jackie Chan. I really like the section where you list out his different injuries. He really is such an interesting guy with such an interesting film career. Maybe offer some more pictures and also maybe some video clips of some of Jackies best moments in action. A Nonny Mouse (talk) 01:25, 28 February 2013 (CET)
You have some really great info. I would like to see some clips of Jackie doing some stunts though. Zombies Don't Eat Vegans (talk) 01:25, 28 February 2013 (CET)
The biography section has a lot of text, which could be broken up with sub-headings or media like pictures. Otherwise it's great :) --Linksys (talk) 08:10, 1 March 2013 (CET)
I agree, the biography section is a bit long and intimidating. Perhaps split it up in to phases of life (i.e. Early Life, Acting Career, etc.). I'd also like to see some more analysis of what makes Jackie Chan so popular in America compared to other martial arts actors. It would also be really interesting to see come kind of analysis of one of his films. You could also take the section about Qualities of Jackie Chan Films and show how those qualities appear throughout his works. You make brief mention of them, but for the most part you have to have actually seen some Jackie Chan films first to really understand what you're talking about. --Professor Wiskers McMeowmouth (talk) 22:26, 1 March 2013 (CET)
It isn't easy to make someone else's work your own, but I think you are well on the way. Yes, this would sound great in first person! I look forward to the finished project.--Dekeo (talk) 07:31, 2 March 2013 (CET)