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This is supposed to be a first-person narrative, so I think that you should really change it to first-person . It should only take a couple minutes to change all of the "he"s to "I"s and I think you'll get a better grade. [[User:Dei|Dei]] 02:59, 17 October 2011 (UTC) | This is supposed to be a first-person narrative, so I think that you should really change it to first-person . It should only take a couple minutes to change all of the "he"s to "I"s and I think you'll get a better grade. [[User:Dei|Dei]] 02:59, 17 October 2011 (UTC) | ||
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| + | Good Job! It may need a little more substance and content to take up the 20 min needed to present to the class. [[User:C lindsay|C lindsay]] 04:26, 17 October 2011 (UTC) 22:26, 16 October 2011 | ||
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| + | I agree, please change it to first-person narrative and elaborate on it further. It would also be good to have more works cited and made more references to the cited works in the text. [[User:Root|Root]] 13:50, 20 October 2011 (UTC) | ||
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| + | The others are right about the material, but, you need to clean it up mechanics-wise. (The writing mechanics that is). For example, ''China'' should always be capitalized. Check the breaks in your sentences- maybe the editing page thinks you hit enter(too many of your sentences are divided in weird places). | ||
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| + | This sounds like a great person to do in first person! He has a lot to be proud of and here is a great chance to present his ideas as if they were your own. This could be a lot of fun! I look forward to your presentation in class.[[User:Dekeo|Dekeo]] 21:31, 21 October 2011 (UTC) | ||
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| + | Interesting. He seems like a cool person to know about. I would try and find a little more information of him in general. Elaborate on how he achieved a 14% growth rate, that is interesting. Don't forget your in-texts...I'm pretty sure we're supposed to do in-texts.. Good work! [[User:Santa Clause|Santa Clause]] 05:16, 8 December 2011 (UTC) | ||
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| + | You still have time to change the article to first-person. If you change all the "hes" to "Is", then you can add more to your paper by defending your actions or admitting your mistakes as leader. Your can admit to not having a high school diploma or you can say it is all a misunderstanding or a plot to defame you by your critics. You can defend your policies. You can admit to corruption or explain your shift in policies. You don't have to study anymore about him in order to make these statements. Just go with your gut feeling of what kind of a person he is. [[User:Dei|Dei]] 02:19, 11 December 2011 (UTC) | ||
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This is supposed to be a first-person narrative, so I think that you should really change it to first-person . It should only take a couple minutes to change all of the "he"s to "I"s and I think you'll get a better grade. Dei 02:59, 17 October 2011 (UTC)
Good Job! It may need a little more substance and content to take up the 20 min needed to present to the class. C lindsay 04:26, 17 October 2011 (UTC) 22:26, 16 October 2011
I agree, please change it to first-person narrative and elaborate on it further. It would also be good to have more works cited and made more references to the cited works in the text. Root 13:50, 20 October 2011 (UTC)
The others are right about the material, but, you need to clean it up mechanics-wise. (The writing mechanics that is). For example, China should always be capitalized. Check the breaks in your sentences- maybe the editing page thinks you hit enter(too many of your sentences are divided in weird places).
This sounds like a great person to do in first person! He has a lot to be proud of and here is a great chance to present his ideas as if they were your own. This could be a lot of fun! I look forward to your presentation in class.Dekeo 21:31, 21 October 2011 (UTC)
Interesting. He seems like a cool person to know about. I would try and find a little more information of him in general. Elaborate on how he achieved a 14% growth rate, that is interesting. Don't forget your in-texts...I'm pretty sure we're supposed to do in-texts.. Good work! Santa Clause 05:16, 8 December 2011 (UTC)
You still have time to change the article to first-person. If you change all the "hes" to "Is", then you can add more to your paper by defending your actions or admitting your mistakes as leader. Your can admit to not having a high school diploma or you can say it is all a misunderstanding or a plot to defame you by your critics. You can defend your policies. You can admit to corruption or explain your shift in policies. You don't have to study anymore about him in order to make these statements. Just go with your gut feeling of what kind of a person he is. Dei 02:19, 11 December 2011 (UTC)