Talk:Buddhism

Loren- Your page has a lot of good information and pictures. Great Job! Leo1299 (talk) 06:41, 16 April 2013 (CEST)

Format

You may want to break up your paper into categories and separate them by lines. Then, add a 'content' box towards the beginning of your document thus allowing readers to more easily navigate your page. Jimmerica 02:22, 3 March 2012 (UTC)

Photos

It would be nice if you could add photos. They would make your article more interesting and easier to understand. However, make sure you avoid violating any copyright issues. Jimmerica 02:24, 3 March 2012 (UTC)

Content

So far, this is just a description of how Buddhism came to be. Where is your argument? Also, you might want to consider the way you write some of the lists. For example, under the heading "Four Noble Truths" you have a whole lot more than 4 things listed. The Four Noble Truths are usually listed as:

• 1- Life is suffering.
• 2- Suffering is caused by attachments.
• 3- Suffering can be overcome.
• 4- Suffering can be overcome by following the Eight-fold path.

(Or some closely written variation of this.)

If you want to add a little explanation about one of the items, remove the asterisk in front of your comment. That way, it doesn't look like the comment is one of the "Truths".

Don't forget the citations and references!

Also, make sure you proof read the final article. Try reading it out loud, it's a good way to catch the mistakes that need correcting before the Teacher does! Dekeo 09:47, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

You need a thesis, maybe you could make the statement that Buddhism is a great religion, or maybe that it is a confusing religion, but a great philosophy. What ever you choose, just make sure that the rest of your paper backs it up. Linksys 18:06, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

Some of your sentences are very fragmented. In order to create a better flow in your paper,elaborate on these fragments. Linksys 05:04, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

Better organization

You got a lot of great information which I also found very informative, however the use of pictures would have helped get a better idea of your exploitation. Also restructuring you paragraphs would give for a better presentation.

Great page with lots of information... only thing I noticed was the pictures didnt have links to the originals :) Kovenor 21:40, 18 April 2012 (UTC)

I would just look into the wording used sometimes, it is a little confusing. Otherwise I like the first person used, the sources, and the pictures. Oprah wind fury(talk) 23:26, 15 April 2013 (MST)