Difference between revisions of "Talk:Terra Cotta Army"
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| + | Dear Bill, please start by uploading your powerpoint presentation and then revise the existing article. Now it is still too short. The final version should be 7 pages. You need not only to describe things, but also switch to the commentator role (maybe indicated by "Contemporary Commentator" and then evaluate and discuss the topic from different angles, put it into context, criticize etc.). If you want to write less, you can integrate more pictures. Please make sure to indicate your source after each sentence or, if there is a whole paragraph with the same source, after each paragraph. You can indicate it like "Smith 2009:345" and in the final section "References" write the long version "Smith, Jared, Confucius revisted, Yale University Press 2009, 415 pp." In the edit mode, section headers are indicated with "=" and sub section headers with "==". In the edit mode, paragraphs need to be marked with 2 line feeds ("Enter" key). 1 Line feed will not show up as a paragraph. For additional editing tips, including how to indicate sources and how to find copyright free pictures, please refer to [http://wiki.vm.rub.de/uvu/index.php/uvu:Community_Portal]. Good luck with your composition! Best, [[User:Root|Root]] ([[User talk:Root|talk]]) 13:36, 25 February 2013 (CET) | ||
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| + | I like all the information you have, and all the pictures. Looks good! [[User:Leo1299|Leo1299]] ([[User talk:Leo1299|talk]]) 07:01, 16 April 2013 (CEST) | ||
| + | I really like your article Bill, I think organizing things a little differently might help, but excellent material and pictures :). [[User:ThaHamburglar|ThaHamburglar]] | ||
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| + | ==There seems to be a lot of question about what is actually there (tomb) and what is legend or hear say. Clarifying material?[[User:Anonymous5|Anonymous5]] ([[User talk:Anonymous5|talk]]) 21:16, 27 February 2013 (CET)== | ||
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You should add your references using MLA format. [[Jimmerica|Jimmerica]] 02:27, 3 March 2012 (UTC) | You should add your references using MLA format. [[Jimmerica|Jimmerica]] 02:27, 3 March 2012 (UTC) | ||
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If you are looking for more content, I think it may be interesting to read more about the production process- what terra cotta is, how it is made, and how each soldier was assembled. Also, what kept this artwork preserved for such a long period of time. [[Jimmerica|Jimmerica]] 02:28, 3 March 2012 (UTC) | If you are looking for more content, I think it may be interesting to read more about the production process- what terra cotta is, how it is made, and how each soldier was assembled. Also, what kept this artwork preserved for such a long period of time. [[Jimmerica|Jimmerica]] 02:28, 3 March 2012 (UTC) | ||
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| + | Thanks for your feedback, I just added the information on how the soldiers were made.[[chris1|chris1]] | ||
Another comment on Content, where is your argument? So far, this is just a description of what happened. And, be sure to proofread this. You have some punctuation issues and many of your sentences don't make sense, the way they are written. Try reading it out loud, I think you'll see what I mean. [[User:Dekeo|Dekeo]] 09:21, 4 March 2012 (UTC) | Another comment on Content, where is your argument? So far, this is just a description of what happened. And, be sure to proofread this. You have some punctuation issues and many of your sentences don't make sense, the way they are written. Try reading it out loud, I think you'll see what I mean. [[User:Dekeo|Dekeo]] 09:21, 4 March 2012 (UTC) | ||
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| + | Great! I just made some grammar corrections.[[chris1|chris1]] | ||
Add the video you found on youtube. Also, I can see your statement on the top that this is one of the greatest discoveries, but where is the content to support that strong statement? Be more descriptive in the size of the army and where it is kept. It would be good to describe the surrounding area or that there are possibly more armies and the tomb of Qin on that land. [[User:Linksys|Linksys]] 17:59, 4 March 2012 (UTC) | Add the video you found on youtube. Also, I can see your statement on the top that this is one of the greatest discoveries, but where is the content to support that strong statement? Be more descriptive in the size of the army and where it is kept. It would be good to describe the surrounding area or that there are possibly more armies and the tomb of Qin on that land. [[User:Linksys|Linksys]] 17:59, 4 March 2012 (UTC) | ||
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| + | Yes, I just added more information on the rest of area around the emperors tomb.[[chris1|chris1]] | ||
And say why they haven't uncovered the rest of the burial place.[[User:Linksys|Linksys]] 18:00, 4 March 2012 (UTC) | And say why they haven't uncovered the rest of the burial place.[[User:Linksys|Linksys]] 18:00, 4 March 2012 (UTC) | ||
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| + | No link to the original source to the pictures.. and maybe add one more reference? [[User:Kovenor|Kovenor]] 21:42, 18 April 2012 (UTC) | ||
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| + | I think adding some more academic sources would be a good addition to the article. The information is good though. [[User:Oprah wind fury| Oprah wind fury]]([[User:Oprah wind fury|talk]]) 23:30, 15 April 2013 (MST) | ||
Latest revision as of 07:31, 16 April 2013
New comments in 2013
Dear Bill, please start by uploading your powerpoint presentation and then revise the existing article. Now it is still too short. The final version should be 7 pages. You need not only to describe things, but also switch to the commentator role (maybe indicated by "Contemporary Commentator" and then evaluate and discuss the topic from different angles, put it into context, criticize etc.). If you want to write less, you can integrate more pictures. Please make sure to indicate your source after each sentence or, if there is a whole paragraph with the same source, after each paragraph. You can indicate it like "Smith 2009:345" and in the final section "References" write the long version "Smith, Jared, Confucius revisted, Yale University Press 2009, 415 pp." In the edit mode, section headers are indicated with "=" and sub section headers with "==". In the edit mode, paragraphs need to be marked with 2 line feeds ("Enter" key). 1 Line feed will not show up as a paragraph. For additional editing tips, including how to indicate sources and how to find copyright free pictures, please refer to [1]. Good luck with your composition! Best, Root (talk) 13:36, 25 February 2013 (CET)
I like all the information you have, and all the pictures. Looks good! Leo1299 (talk) 07:01, 16 April 2013 (CEST) I really like your article Bill, I think organizing things a little differently might help, but excellent material and pictures :). ThaHamburglar
There seems to be a lot of question about what is actually there (tomb) and what is legend or hear say. Clarifying material?Anonymous5 (talk) 21:16, 27 February 2013 (CET)
References
You should add your references using MLA format. Jimmerica 02:27, 3 March 2012 (UTC)
Content
If you are looking for more content, I think it may be interesting to read more about the production process- what terra cotta is, how it is made, and how each soldier was assembled. Also, what kept this artwork preserved for such a long period of time. Jimmerica 02:28, 3 March 2012 (UTC)
Thanks for your feedback, I just added the information on how the soldiers were made.chris1
Another comment on Content, where is your argument? So far, this is just a description of what happened. And, be sure to proofread this. You have some punctuation issues and many of your sentences don't make sense, the way they are written. Try reading it out loud, I think you'll see what I mean. Dekeo 09:21, 4 March 2012 (UTC)
Great! I just made some grammar corrections.chris1
Add the video you found on youtube. Also, I can see your statement on the top that this is one of the greatest discoveries, but where is the content to support that strong statement? Be more descriptive in the size of the army and where it is kept. It would be good to describe the surrounding area or that there are possibly more armies and the tomb of Qin on that land. Linksys 17:59, 4 March 2012 (UTC)
Yes, I just added more information on the rest of area around the emperors tomb.chris1
And say why they haven't uncovered the rest of the burial place.Linksys 18:00, 4 March 2012 (UTC)
No link to the original source to the pictures.. and maybe add one more reference? Kovenor 21:42, 18 April 2012 (UTC)
I think adding some more academic sources would be a good addition to the article. The information is good though. Oprah wind fury(talk) 23:30, 15 April 2013 (MST)