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| − | Looks like you've put some work into | + | Looks like you've put some work into this. Is this a revised article, one that was first created last year? The second name seems to imply that it is, but the history says it was just created two days ago. Anyway, I have a couple of points to bring up on the plot synopsis: It's a plumber, not cook that Fang is passed off as and he uses the police car to follow the married lover (boss); not exactly smart (it is using the vehicle for personal use) but not exactly shady either.<br/> |
| + | OK, on to more serious matters. I don't see any citations. Not on the pictures and not in the written parts. Unless you personally created all this material, you really do need to tell us where you got it; to give credit to the original sources. And, unless you got all the info from one source, you should have a citation after every section, if not every paragraph. Also, while online sources can be good, it doesn't hurt to add a written one or two (the texts used for class mention a few things related to this show). Don't give up! It is a good article, or will be when you get the citations in! [[User:Dekeo|Dekeo]] ([[User talk:Dekeo|talk]]) 04:05, 16 April 2013 (CEST) | ||
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| + | You have so much information! Its great! The major sections of text could be broken up with pictures/screenshots of the scenes being talked about. Also, you should include any awards the film won/was nominated for. [[User:Linksys|Linksys]] ([[User talk:Linksys|talk]]) 05:47, 16 April 2013 (CEST) | ||
Latest revision as of 05:47, 16 April 2013
Looks like you've put some work into this. Is this a revised article, one that was first created last year? The second name seems to imply that it is, but the history says it was just created two days ago. Anyway, I have a couple of points to bring up on the plot synopsis: It's a plumber, not cook that Fang is passed off as and he uses the police car to follow the married lover (boss); not exactly smart (it is using the vehicle for personal use) but not exactly shady either.
OK, on to more serious matters. I don't see any citations. Not on the pictures and not in the written parts. Unless you personally created all this material, you really do need to tell us where you got it; to give credit to the original sources. And, unless you got all the info from one source, you should have a citation after every section, if not every paragraph. Also, while online sources can be good, it doesn't hurt to add a written one or two (the texts used for class mention a few things related to this show). Don't give up! It is a good article, or will be when you get the citations in! Dekeo (talk) 04:05, 16 April 2013 (CEST)
You have so much information! Its great! The major sections of text could be broken up with pictures/screenshots of the scenes being talked about. Also, you should include any awards the film won/was nominated for. Linksys (talk) 05:47, 16 April 2013 (CEST)