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| − | + | :I would like to see how some of the ideologies mentioned affected the warring states rather than just listing them. This leaves a lot of loose ends for the reader to track down.[[User:Anonymous5|Anonymous5]] ([[User talk:Anonymous5|talk]]) 21:29, 27 February 2013 (CET) | |
Your presentation of information is nice. It does not look like it is long enough though and I'm not sure if you are still supposed to use the first person since your paper is about a period. I would email the professor about that. [[User:Oprah wind fury| Oprah wind fury]] ([[User talk:Oprah wind fury|talk]]) 15:12, 27 February 2013 (MST) | Your presentation of information is nice. It does not look like it is long enough though and I'm not sure if you are still supposed to use the first person since your paper is about a period. I would email the professor about that. [[User:Oprah wind fury| Oprah wind fury]] ([[User talk:Oprah wind fury|talk]]) 15:12, 27 February 2013 (MST) | ||
| − | + | :I like your brevity and incorporation of pictures. It flowed well.[[User:Dr_who|Dr_who]] ([[User talk:Dr_who|talk]]) 28 February 2013 | |
| − | + | :I like the maps that show the differences in the kingdoms. I agree it could maybe be a little longer [[User:Leo1299|Leo1299]] ([[User talk:Leo1299|talk]]) 02:39, 1 March 2013 (CET) | |
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| + | ::Dear Grant, in general a good article. The bare text is still too short, although with the pictures and lists, it comes to 6.5 screen pages. Also, you need to mention the sources more correctly, with page numbers and, if available, with links. It is not of much use simply to list some books in the references. We need to know the source of each sentence (if it is not your own finding, conclusion or comment). To call this region "China" at that time is at least questionable, but you can quote a historian calling it China. I think, it is a good idea to have links to the most important schools of thought and philosophers. Best, [[User:Root|Root]] ([[User talk:Root|talk]]) 17:40, 4 March 2013 (CET) | ||
Latest revision as of 18:40, 4 March 2013
- I would like to see how some of the ideologies mentioned affected the warring states rather than just listing them. This leaves a lot of loose ends for the reader to track down.Anonymous5 (talk) 21:29, 27 February 2013 (CET)
Your presentation of information is nice. It does not look like it is long enough though and I'm not sure if you are still supposed to use the first person since your paper is about a period. I would email the professor about that. Oprah wind fury (talk) 15:12, 27 February 2013 (MST)
- I like the maps that show the differences in the kingdoms. I agree it could maybe be a little longer Leo1299 (talk) 02:39, 1 March 2013 (CET)
- Dear Grant, in general a good article. The bare text is still too short, although with the pictures and lists, it comes to 6.5 screen pages. Also, you need to mention the sources more correctly, with page numbers and, if available, with links. It is not of much use simply to list some books in the references. We need to know the source of each sentence (if it is not your own finding, conclusion or comment). To call this region "China" at that time is at least questionable, but you can quote a historian calling it China. I think, it is a good idea to have links to the most important schools of thought and philosophers. Best, Root (talk) 17:40, 4 March 2013 (CET)