Talk:Qu Yuan

New comments in 2013

This being my own article and because I have such a discrete username (haha) I will comment on the comments already made to my page by my fellow students. Thank you for the feed back and the further instruction on how to properly format the page. I agree with the comments made about adding more to the intro and also about the suicide. I have continued to look for further information on Qu Yuan's suicide but have not found more than what I have written about. Also pictures are comming :) I have had a hard time figuring out how to get them on the page. Thanks for all the suggestions! Samantha S (talk) 03:01, 1 March 2013 (CET)

Dear Samantha, please start by uploading your powerpoint presentation and then extend your article. Now it is still too short. The final version should be 7 pages. You need to stick to the 1st person narrative ("I", "me" etc.) and not only describe things, but also switch to the commentator role (maybe indicated by "Contemporary Commentator" and then evaluate and discuss the topic from different angles, put it into context, criticize etc.). If you want to write less, you can integrate more pictures. Please make sure to indicate your source after each sentence or, if there is a whole paragraph with the same source, after each paragraph. You can indicate it like "Smith 2009:345" and in the final section "References" write the long version "Smith, Jared, Confucius revisted, Yale University Press 2009, 415 pp." In the edit mode, section headers are indicated with "=" and sub section headers with "==". In the edit mode, paragraphs need to be marked with 2 line feeds ("Enter" key). 1 Line feed will not show up as a paragraph. For additional editing tips, including how to indicate sources and how to find copyright free pictures, please refer to [1]. Good luck with your composition! Best, Root (talk) 13:43, 25 February 2013 (CET)

Dear Samantha, The article reads quite good. Maybe you still have a little bit of time to add more pictures and write some more comments, placing Qu Yuan in context.

I have corrected the following things:

No colomn behind headers.

Headers are made with equal signs "=" in front and at the end of a header, not with " ' ' ' ".

Please do not forget to sign your contents entry on the main page "with Root (talk) 21:37, 27 February 2013 (CET)".

If you want to have a line feed in Wiki, please type 2 line feeds. I corrected that and it makes the article look longer now again. Your image was not correctly inserted. You also did not correctly cite the photographer "ocean yamaha". I have downloaded the image from Flickr, uploaded it to Wiki, copied the way an image should look like from another article and then updated all the information, including the file name. Now it shows up correctly. This is an image of a dragon boat. Do you also have images of Qu Yuan or his works?

I have also inserted your powerpoint presentation.

I am happy to do all of this for you, but I am confident that you would also be able to do it by following our step-by-step introduction [[2]] or by copying the things you need from other articles you are able to do it by yourself too. Maybe you can try that for further images, if you want to add more.Root (talk) 21:37, 27 February 2013 (CET)

Reads well with a lot of good information. You might want to combine the parts about his suicide with the end of his biography. Having a small section dedicated to a short explanation of his death feels a little clunky when it could just be combined with his biography. Also think about some pictures you could add that could really give us more information about such an interesting man. A Nonny Mouse (talk) 00:30, 28 February 2013 (CET)

Such interesting things! I think that some pictures could really add to this article, as well as some more information about the suicide, if that is available. You could also possibly expand the Intro section because it seems a little strange being so short. --MerchantThief (talk) 00:52, 28 February 2013 (CET)

Samantha, I really enjoyed this reading of Qu Yuan. I thought the pictures used were great and gave life to the page. I also thought they way you laid out the sections with a commentary clearly marked right afterwards was great. I wish we had a bit more details of the Suicide. I felt hanging after reading that section like there should be more. If this was not an option because of lack of historic detail about Qu Yuan, then overall great job.--Joshua B. (talk) 19:27, 1 March 2013 (CET)

I am in agreement with some of the other statements in that your piece feels like it could be longer. Ignatius J Reilly (talk) 21:53, 1 March 2013 (CET)