Difference between revisions of "Talk:Guo Moruo (1892 -1978)"
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I enjoyed your presentation and I thought it was well prepared. Reddragon | I enjoyed your presentation and I thought it was well prepared. Reddragon | ||
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| + | You have presented a lot of information, but it would be good for you to check the writing. The punctuation and grammar mistakes distract the reader from the content- instead of concentrating on what you say, it becomes too easy to concentrate on the mistakes instead. For example, you frequently change tenses ("he studies" instead of "he studied"- "they reach out" instead of "they reached out" etc.). Remember, a nation's name should always be capitalized ("Japan" not "japan" and "China" not "china")- you should check for proper capitalization and punctuation. It might help to print this out and look at it that way (or, perhaps, to have a friend read it to check for grammar and punctuation mistakes). When you say "as follows" you should use a colon (:) before you start with the list. It was very interesting- please don't misunderstand me about that. I would love to re-read this article after you get it cleaned up.[[User:Dekeo|Dekeo]] 20:15, 12 October 2012 (UTC) | ||
Revision as of 22:15, 12 October 2012
Your first section is looking good. Ellafitzgerald 05:33, 9 October 2012 (UTC)
At first it looks great, then I noticed you copied the entire Motivations section from the Liu Xun article! And you thought we wouldn't notice? Sorry to be so blunt, but you've got some revising to do. Mingemperor 17:23, 9 October 2012 (UTC)
It looks good but the first thing I noticed was the picture of the Madman's diary by Lu Xun. Then of course I noticed you copied quite a bit.Pips 17:36, 9 October 2012 (UTC)
I think the proper changes were made, and I enjoyed the article. --Foot 19:53, 10 October 2012 (UTC)
I enjoyed your presentation and I thought it was well prepared. Reddragon
You have presented a lot of information, but it would be good for you to check the writing. The punctuation and grammar mistakes distract the reader from the content- instead of concentrating on what you say, it becomes too easy to concentrate on the mistakes instead. For example, you frequently change tenses ("he studies" instead of "he studied"- "they reach out" instead of "they reached out" etc.). Remember, a nation's name should always be capitalized ("Japan" not "japan" and "China" not "china")- you should check for proper capitalization and punctuation. It might help to print this out and look at it that way (or, perhaps, to have a friend read it to check for grammar and punctuation mistakes). When you say "as follows" you should use a colon (:) before you start with the list. It was very interesting- please don't misunderstand me about that. I would love to re-read this article after you get it cleaned up.Dekeo 20:15, 12 October 2012 (UTC)