Talk:Kung Fu

Copyright issues of film clips

I will be adding citations soon, also, if anyone sees this, can I put that Avatar clip on here, or would there be copyright issues? Hannah A 02:22, 1 March 2012 (UTC)

Description vs. Arguments/original thoughts

This is a very good description of Kungfu, however it would be great to have some more argumentation in it, see the handout. 161.28.159.52 22:18, 2 March 2012 (UTC)

Who wrote this? 161.28.159.52 22:19, 2 March 2012 (UTC)

Perhaps an opening paragraph before the 'contents' box would give you a chance to introduce your topic and establish a thesis? Jimmerica 02:31, 3 March 2012 (UTC)

I introduced myself, and stated my experience. I put my thesis in there, and I incorporated it into the different systems/styles and Shaolin animals sections, I hope its clear enough. Hannah A 19:19, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

Have a thesis to create a better argumentive paper.Linksys 18:08, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

References

• You need to list your references. Jimmerica 02:29, 3 March 2012 (UTC)
• And don't forget your citations in the body of your paper. Dekeo 09:29, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

Done! :) Hannah A 03:55, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

Proof Read!

Little things, like china instead of China (should always be capitalized), punctuation and the flow of your sentences. Some of them are written rather awkwardly. Try reading your paper out loud. Sometimes that helps you find the awkward spots. (Check out the paragraph just before the section on two systems- the one about philosophy) Dekeo 09:29, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

Thank you! I fixed the China capitalization, and I am currently working on making my sentences less awkward. Hannah A 18:17, 4 March 2012 (UTC)