Talk:Xi Jinping

This is supposed to be a first-person narrative, so I think that you should really change it to first-person . It should only take a couple minutes to change all of the "he"s to "I"s and I think you'll get a better grade. Dei 02:59, 17 October 2011 (UTC)

Good Job! It may need a little more substance and content to take up the 20 min needed to present to the class. C lindsay 04:26, 17 October 2011 (UTC) 22:26, 16 October 2011

I agree, please change it to first-person narrative and elaborate on it further. It would also be good to have more works cited and made more references to the cited works in the text. Root 13:50, 20 October 2011 (UTC)

The others are right about the material, but, you need to clean it up mechanics-wise. (The writing mechanics that is). For example, China should always be capitalized. Check the breaks in your sentences- maybe the editing page thinks you hit enter(too many of your sentences are divided in weird places).

This sounds like a great person to do in first person! He has a lot to be proud of and here is a great chance to present his ideas as if they were your own. This could be a lot of fun! I look forward to your presentation in class.Dekeo 21:31, 21 October 2011 (UTC)