Talk:Canonization of Chinese Literature in the East and West.

Hi. Looks good, but needs to be longer and have more argumentation in it. Please add sources of pictures and tell us exactly, which passage comes from which of the 3 references indicated. Thank you very much! Root 00:06, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

Make sure you source more and i would clean it up a bitt into more uniform blocks and make sure the pictures are contained within thier own section they seem to over lap. Alchemist1330

Good advice from the others. Now, for my two cents worth of comments. Watch out for "passive" sentences. I'll explain what I mean. Your first sentence talks about how Chinese cannon "has had" many different... Those "be" verbs (have had, would have done, had been done, was influenced, etc.) are prime indicators of a passive sentence. Try re-writing it with active verbs.

"The evolution of China’s literary canon has had (passive "be" verb) many different factors contributing to its formation." thus becomes " Many different factors contributed (active verb) to the evolution and formation of China's literary canon." Your sentences will flow better and sound more natural if you write with active verbs.

Also, be sure to double check your spelling and capitalization- "China" for example, should always be capitalized. I look forward to reading the final paper. Dekeo 06:23, 4 March 2012 (UTC)