Talk:Ouyang Xiu

Hello!

The poem, White Egret, seems to have every other line in a giant box. I don't think this is what you intended! I'll post more comments when they arise. Thanks~

--Checksum 18:34, 3 March 2012 (UTC)

Instead of a simple list of facts, I think your paper should read more like an essay, with full sentences and paragraphs. Name 07:51, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

Also, what is your thesis statement? I think it would be good if you put your thesis in the introduction, and then tried to carry it into each of your sections, and then made a final conclusion combining your mini conclusions from each sections. Name 07:54, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

I'm working on it- My thesis statement is still a little vague but it is in there- just not in the intro- next section. Hopefully, by the time I finish, the argument will seem clear. Right now, I think there will be two "conclusions" one for the first person part and one for the over all paper- and there, I plan to recap the paper's argument. Thanks for your suggestions.I need all the help I can get! Licia K 08:47, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

HELP!

Licia, can you tell me what page in the textbook it says that Su Shi liked to write about manly things? Do you remember it saying that? It wasn't in the first section labeled Su Shi, but in a section afterwards I think. Thanks! Alexis Sagen 16:43, 4 March 2012 (UTC)