Talk:Ouyang Xiu

Hello!

The poem, White Egret, seems to have every other line in a giant box. I don't think this is what you intended! I'll post more comments when they arise. Thanks~

--Checksum 18:34, 3 March 2012 (UTC)

I really like the style, it is very comforting and nice. I think you need to length some segments. You said you'll talk about how you were a writer and literary critic but that didn't really develop well. There is also a broken picture, I'm sure you'll fix that in no time. Besides that I'm really liking how its going. --Checksum 03:34, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

Instead of a simple list of facts, I think your paper should read more like an essay, with full sentences and paragraphs. Name 07:51, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

Also, what is your thesis statement? I think it would be good if you put your thesis in the introduction, and then tried to carry it into each of your sections, and then made a final conclusion combining your mini conclusions from each sections. Name 07:54, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

I'm working on it- My thesis statement is still a little vague but it is in there- just not in the intro- next section. Hopefully, by the time I finish, the argument will seem clear. Right now, I think there will be two "conclusions" one for the first person part and one for the over all paper- and there, I plan to recap the paper's argument. Thanks for your suggestions.I need all the help I can get! Licia K 08:47, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

Alchemist1330

maybe add in a little section that you argue something with, i'm not sure what or maybe have a section by you that you analyze one of his peoem and support your claims, which i think is an argument. anyway like it allot. If you want you can have more picture but i like the airy look. also add a works cited or references at the bottom i can't see any

I added a references tab so you can get started :)!

Comment 6

Nice work so far. It would be nice to have some more pictures~ Also, one of the lines of the poem is formatted weirdly, maybe fix that? --Whatisthis 03:54, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

I'm still working on this. Thanks for the heads up.Licia K 07:08, 5 March 2012 (UTC)