Talk:Qin Shihuangdi

New comments in 2013

Dear Emmanuel, I have uploaded your powerpoint presentation. Please revise the existing article. Now it is still too short. The final version should be 7 pages. You need to stick to the 1st person narrative ("I", "me" etc.) and not only describe things, but also switch to the commentator role (maybe indicated by "Contemporary Commentator" and then evaluate and discuss the topic from different angles, put it into context, criticize etc.). If you want to write less, you can integrate more pictures. Please make sure to indicate your source after each sentence or, if there is a whole paragraph with the same source, after each paragraph. You can indicate it like "Smith 2009:345" and in the final section "References" write the long version "Smith, Jared, Confucius revisted, Yale University Press 2009, 415 pp." In the edit mode, section headers are indicated with "=" and sub section headers with "==". In the edit mode, paragraphs need to be marked with 2 line feeds ("Enter" key). 1 Line feed will not show up as a paragraph. For additional editing tips, including how to indicate sources and how to find copyright free pictures, please refer to [1]. Good luck with your composition! Best, Root (talk) 13:31, 25 February 2013 (CET)

Dear Emmanuel, it looks almost perfect now. The only thing I miss is the sources of the images. Can you still add them? Thank you! Root (talk) 18:27, 4 March 2013 (CET)

Long poem. I really don't like first person as it is really hard to keep going and not revert to third person at times. Content is good but choppy at times and needs filling out in places.Anonymous5 (talk) 21:32, 27 February 2013 (CET)

I kind of liked the poem at the beginning. It is a little different approach. I agree that the content is good but a little choppy. You have done well though for using the first person throughout. Oprah wind fury (talk) 15:19, 27 February 2013 (MST)

Thanks for the comments! I'm still working on filling the holes and incorporating the existing article with my work. That is why it is so choppy. The poem in the beginning was there prior in the existing article, it is not my favorite part of the article and I am considering replacing it with a traditional introduction. Emmanuel R (talk) 05:45, 28 February 2013 (CET)

Qin Shi Huang is one of the most memorable figures that I've seen in this class. I like that you pointed out that China still bears the name of his dynasty. He's particularly memorable because of his terra cotta clay army. Dr who (talk) 28 February 2013 (CET)

I think it's looking pretty good. I kind of think a picture of the painting of him that got the artist killed would be nice touch. Leo1299 (talk) 03:11, 1 March 2013 (CET)

Reminder- there is some question as to whether or not the book burning really happened- you present it as fact- this might be a good spot to add a commentary, similar to the spot where you pointed out the bias of the Han Dynasty records. As to the "poem" at the first- yeah, it is a little long, but it does summarize what he accomplished in his reign. Good luck with the rest of the revision.--Dekeo (talk) 08:06, 2 March 2013 (CET)

Old comments

I'm sorry Professor, There is just no way I'm going to have this done by midnight. I just saved my most recent update and I will continue to work on this until I finish, but that will be some time after midnight, I'm afraid. I'll take whatever late penalty you feel is fair. I knew the deadline. I have no one but myself to blame for finishing late.Licia K 07:04, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

Scope

I know, it's just a start. More pictures, words and citations will be added.Licia K 05:33, 6 February 2012 (UTC)

This is not even a start, it is just a stub. Can anybody help Licia with it? 161.28.159.52 22:37, 24 February 2012 (UTC)

Who is IP 161.28.159.52? Please login with your user name first! 161.28.159.52 22:38, 24 February 2012 (UTC)

Content

Where is all that great information from your presentation? I feel that becoming a ruler at such a young age and accomplishing so much in such short time, a timeline of some sort would be very useful in putting Qin Shihuangdi's life in perpective. Jimmerica 02:33, 3 March 2012 (UTC)

I'm working on it- slowly, but I will get back to this article. Good idea about a time line- we'll have to see how it works out. Licia K 09:12, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

Also, you should look into uploading the powerpoint, Then you could use different pictures in the article. And, don't forget to proof read the final article. But, definitely, finish writing this. You started almost a month ago and should be further along than you are- especially since the paper is due in less than 24 hours! Dekeo 09:53, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

If you put it in the perspective of Qin, you still need to address the faults of the Emperor, such as killing of philosophers, and the book burnings. Linksys 17:48, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

The dates when Qin unified China are informative, but they do need to be tied into the rest of the page. Put it in a sentence or paragraph about his conquerings, this will help it make sense. Linksys 05:09, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

Credits

• You have quoted from one of my books. Why don't you mention the sources? 161.28.159.52 22:38, 24 February 2012 (UTC)
• Cite! Cite! Cite! Dekeo 09:53, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

After you get more content, you should add your references using MLA format. Jimmerica 02:33, 3 March 2012 (UTC)

Yup. It's in the works. I'm looking for better sources for the pictures (you know, free of copy-write issues.) Licia K 09:12, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

Wiki format?

I though that the information you had was good, but the format you used had no organized structure. The use of actual paragraphs would have been good and pictures to help get a better idea of what you are describing.

I'm still working on this page.Licia K 07:04, 5 March 2012 (UTC)